Cathryn; clarification: chapter 1 was a mess when I last saw it maybe 2 years ago. I have not seen the rest of her draft because she wants to rewrite it after she gets a draft done. Since she has writing skill, I rest is liable to be good.

The lesson on chapter 1 is that too many revisions can cause problems, and you are better off sometimes starting off fresh.

I was there a week ago, and will be back for part of the weekend Oct 30-31. HD graduates spring 2011.
Chris